Friday, 24 July 2009

Bitesize 4.1



Bitesize 4.1

Nerves were niggling at Ed's conscience as they drove towards Gollanfield, Inverness. This had been pretty easy. Almost too easy. Whether Crowley would find this guy hinged on a few possibilities. Ed wondered whether Crowley knew the names of those he sought, or whether that was why he wanted Raddick so badly. He couldn't shake the fact too that Crowley's having Raddick was definitely a bad thing. Raddick had escaped from the base before. He knew its weak points, knew where its guards were. He also had to wonder to what extent Crowley had powers over the mirrors. He knew he could pull people through, but could he pass through them himself? If so they were never going to be able to race him to find all these men. And what of this current guy? Jean Fredericq? Did he know yet what lurked within him. Had it woken? Ed doubted it. The guy had a facebook page and a gaming profile suggesting long hours spent alone, fragging people on Halo. Just a regular Joe, he could even be Ed himself. No, chances were this guy was still himself. Ed couldn't picture Raddick doing anything like that. He looked over at Katia on his left, she was tucking a gun into her waistband and staring intently ahead. He glanced in the rearview mirror at Grace. He still couldn't believe how calm and complacent she was. He'd expected the T-alpha to be full of rage and anger. Perhaps the werewolves weren't so far from humanity after all. She still seemed to have her own personality. He couldn't help but ponder whether werewolves had been painted in a bad light by the actions of just a handful of them. Both Grace and Dennis seemed so... normal. Maybe the personality of the human side was the important factor. It would only take one like Raddick after all to build them up a reputation as a killer. Just like modern racism he thought. You see one black man on the news branded a killer and it snowballs on from there. Just one Muslim flies a plane into a building and they're all branded fanatics. He recalled something Katia had said about awareness in the wolves. How initially they have no idea that they are one. That their violent behaviour stems from that unawareness, from the animal instinct of a wolf. A hunter. And once they gained control... well, the Bureau did have a werewolf before. That was before Ed's time though, before his father too.
A signpost for Gollanfield pulled him from his reverie and he took the turning. Almost there.


Just a short while later Ed pulled up beside a detached house on a quiet road. It stood alone, the nearest house some distance away. A set of rusted disused railway tracks cut across the road beside it and the front lawn, wild and overgrown was encompassed by a battered wooden fence, its white paint faded and chipped.
"Looks quiet." said Katia as they got out of the car.
"I can't say I'm surprised." said Ed.
Katia had drawn her gun and he did the same as he made for the gate. He flipped the latch and went into the garden and walked up to the front door. The glass was frosted and he tried to peer through but couldn't make anything out. The windows on either side had thick curtains blocking the view. Feeling somewhat awkward Ed reached up and rapped on the door. A few seconds passed in deathly silence. Ed rapped again, harder, expecting the door to be flung open at any second, but it didn't happen.
"Maybe he's not home." said Katia.
"I doubt it." said Ed, "All this guy does is play Halo."
He tried the handle cautiously but the door was locked.
"I don't like this." said Ed, "Let's try the back."
They made their way round the rear of the house to the back door. The glass here wasn't frosted and Ed looked through the grubby pane at the kitchen beyond. He spied the sink and the washboard. A plastic rack sat atop it holding a couple of plates and some cutlery.
"Well he's been here recently I guess." said Ed. He tried the handle but again it was locked. He rapped again, loud on the glass but there was still no sign of life. Confusion was rapidly giving way to fear for Ed. He looked at Grace.
"We're going in."
She nodded, udnerstanding immediately and as Ed took a few paces back from the door Grace transformed. It took a matter of seconds though it seemed so much longer, watching her grow impossibly before his eyes, almost instantaneously sprouting hair and claws, the skull cracking and reshaping. Ed couldn't help but shudder as he stared into Grace's wolf eyes. She looked over the door and with speed that took Ed by surprise she launched a powerful kick with her hind leg. The clawed foot connected with the door and it shifted under the blow. She kicked again, harder and the lock gave way, torn from its housing as the door caved inward. It swang back hard, slamming into a cupboard, the glass pane cracking under the impact. Ed held his gun up and went inside. Grace followed him, with Katia bringing up the rear. There was a door at the rear of the kitchen and Ed opened it tentatively and peeked through. The room beyond was a small dining room slash office. A high end Alienware computer took up a desk on the right wall. It sat in standby mode, the keyboard glowing a soft blue, ready to awake at the touch of a button. Ed ignored it, walking toward the next door as quietly as he could. He tugged the handle with one hand, holding the gun in his left as he pulled the door open. It was the staircase to his left and immediately in front, another door that lead presumably into the living room. The door in front had no handle and Ed pushed it. Silently it swung open...

6 comments:

  1. Hee hee. What a stopping point! ^^
    Well I've tried to expand a little on Grace's motivation. Hope that helps a little.
    Let me know if there's anything else because obviously, in my head, it all makes sense but sometimes I might forget to justify it in context. :P

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  2. Yum! That was a tasty bitesize. It had it all: Crunchy Action Corn imbedded in cream of contemplation(tm)covered with Syrup of Suspense(R). Can i have the recipe? :)


    Yeah that is much better. Some insights or flashbacks and the like is the glue that keeps the story pieces together. It also makes the storyline and the protagonists believable (and their motivations). You could involve the other persons too sometimes. (If it fits the storyline though) For instance i wonder what Grace might think of all this and her feelings. Or Katias? ... But well i don't wanna push you to things that make it too complicated. I just like those introspections :) (every now and then)
    :D

    C.

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  3. I agree that it would be interesting to get the other characters perspectives but I realised early on that that would mean having to follow Katia at the same time as dealing with Ed. Whilst this would be fine in a big old book, it doesn't suit the Bitesize formula in this instance and that is why we will be seeing events purely from Ed's perspective, leaving you to contemplate for yourself what Grace's real motivations are. :)
    After all, if we were to follow Katia and Grace, then naturally we would need to see Crowley's perspective... and Alf's... and then, well, where do we draw the line? :P

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  4. Hmmm yeah i realized that too the moment i wrote it down. Perhaps you are right and this switching of perspectives is only suitable for a full fledged novel the size of lets say 300+ pages *scratchhead*

    Have you read some stories of Stephen King? Sometimes ...no actually quite often he told the storylines from all kinds of perspectives... the goodies... the villains... even the unknown evil lurking in the dark. I remember IT and Randall Flagg and the Evil lurking in the Mine in Desperation. Sometimes King switched perspective to increase the suspense ..creating goosebumps how evil ES or Randall Flagg is... like slipping in his/it pitch-dark mind to feel the real horror... hmm hard to explain for a non-writer like me. But maybe you get the picture. Well yes as you said, hard to do in this small setting and yes it would reveal too much eventually also. Hehe in your story i would love to slip in Crowley's mind to read his real plans. ;)

    C.

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  5. hmmm... after rethinking it... it would work for some main characters when they are on their own...
    For example in case they got separated from each other hunting down Crowley, that way the reader slips in Katia's view for a while or Grace's. Well just my musings. Actually it isn't -that- important. *shrugs*

    C.

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  6. Yeah, I'm no stranger to perspective. Some of the In the Blood's told from Yulg's point of view were really enjoyable. And a few times we were treated to a glimpse of what The Keepers were up to. It's necessary to give the reader all the information. Perhaps we'll follow a more traditional route next bitesize, but for this particular project I like the idea of trying to stick with just Ed's viewpoint.

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