So I haven't posted any poetry for a while. Why? Mainly because, as always, I've been trying to improve upon what has come before. Specifically there are two main areas I've been trying to work on. Those are, better metaphors in an overall sense and a more structured approach to internal rhyming, both intended to build upon my own style and push it closer to the level of skill displayed by my own personal poetic hero, Martin Walkyier.
It's not an easy task though and with that in mind I present this piece. I'm not that happy with the overall feel of it, but I think it showcases well how I'm trying to pull the internal rhymes together. The rhythm of the piece itself is stolen, or should I say borrowed, from Mr Walkyier and fits a few Skyclad tunes that I've been paying attention to such as Polkageist! and Something to Cling To. :)
Succubus
She wore the shadows like a cloak
Reeking of desire
Her voice was darkness when she spoke
Her eyes sparked tongues of fire
She promised me with honesty
All that my body needed
But her final words of warning
Were the ones that went unheeded
Succubus, you devil woman
Sent down here to tempt me
My heart is full of lust and thus
You always offer plenty
But I wished I listened as you hissed
My soul would be the cost
If I'd only known from that first kiss
My spirit would be lost
So every night, to my delight
My carnal hunger sated
I'll pay the price in the afterlife
For love I should have waited
Succubus, you devil woman
Sent down here to tempt me
My heart is full of lust and thus
You always offer plenty
© Charon 2009
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